Hey All! Here's a snip from my WIP Teenage Hillbilly Hell. Thanks for taking a peek! I can't wait to see what everyone else has come up with :)
Title: Teenage Hillbilly Hell
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I love your MC! I love how she thinks she is so confident, but as soon as she feels the slightest bit rejected, she wants to fix herself... Awesome voice.
Ah.... I got to the end and was like Wait, what now? What does he say to her?
And can I just say that I love boys like this... sigh...
ARRGH what happens???
Megan you are so right. There's a shortage of boys like him.
Avery is so real! She shines through in this scene, and you really get a sense for who she is and how she thinks. Now, what's up with Holden?!?!?!?!
Oh, I love honorable guys like Holden!!! Or at least I think he's honorable, lol. I love Avery's thought process on what in the hell's wrong with him that he won't sleep with her, lol!
I love the awkwardness at the start! it is so real ! And I love your MC voice and her thought process. Great snippet.
What happens?! I was so hooked in and then it just ended. This was really really good. I also like Avery's thought process and the opening paragraph made me laugh! Awe and see I envy you Holden. He seems like such a sweetie-pie, when the majority of my male characters are jerks LOL!
This was really good and now I'm wondering what he has to show her. Hmm...
Wow, what's up with him? Interesting scenario. I like your MC and can't wait to read more! I was hooked quickly.
He seems cool. She sounds like a jerk. BUT [and it's a big but] I actually read all the way through it. I don't do that for most.
I was hoping that rather than showing her that he is actually a girl, that he would explain that he didn't want to rush into a relationship...with a whore.
Mark--LOL Good thing he's not a girl or else you'd just gave away my entire story LOL
Aaaaw. He's a sweet guy. And I like Avery too, love that her usual way of thinking ('bout guys) is being challenged :)
I find your MC really entertaining. Made me laugh. Great voice!
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