Tuesday Teaser Time!!

Tuesday, January 12, 2010


Hey everyone! I can't wait to see everyone's teasers. The 100% awesomeness with the AW crew is amazing. There should be a law against so much talent being in one place. hehehehehehe

Demon At My Door
(Unedited 1st draft)
Scene: Dressing room at the Mall


Snipped :D

14 comments:

Karla Calalang said...

Oh wow! LOVED THIS SNIP! I love the last paragraph. Dialogue is great, the descriptions of her hair and eyes = Amazing!

Awesome, awesome tease!

Becca said...

Yeah, she should dump the asshat and go for the good guy. ;) That's my vote. lol

Great teaser!! :D

Bailey McKay Clement said...

Love how yours flows-- especially that awesome dialogue!

Kathy Bradey said...

Great teaser. Makes me wonder if she really needs to impress him with clothes.

Lia Victoria said...

“I’m sure he did, sweetie, but now he’ll have to roll his tongue up off the floor.”

Lol, for some reason I really liked that line. Like, she was humoring her while amping it up all absent-mindedly. I don't know. Nice tease, hehe :]

corrinejackson said...

Great dialogue. Very realistic.

Kaitlin Ward said...

Nice! This is such a great tease, esp. since if I remember right from your other teasers, Stew is a giant butthole. *cheers for Rick*

LizPage said...

You know I just LOVE this! The dialogue is so awesome, the voices are so so real.

Amanda P. said...

Loved this! The last paragraph was sooo intriguing!

Sage said...

Aw, so cute.

houndrat said...

Go TEAM RICK--Woot! Stew needs a good butt-kickin! Fun snip. Does it make me girly to love scenes where girls get dressed up/made over? Oh well, I confess then! :)

Demon Sisters--WOOT! :D

Karla Nellenbach said...

I'm already rooting for Rick! Great snip. Can't wait to read more!

Angie said...

Ah, I remember that giddy feeling. You do a nice job of describing the whole dressing room scene and the teen angst. Great tease!

Krista Ashe said...

HAHA, I have to agree with Team Rick! But I love him even more that he loved her just the way she was!! Awesome scene, and I love how Natalie is trying to change from her Goth girl ways! Can't wait to beta more!

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