This is from page two of my new WIP. Hopefully, this story jump starts my writing mojo. With that being said, here's my disclaimer: CAUTION--Super, Duper Rough Draft!
As always comments, thoughts, questions...are appreciated.
As always comments, thoughts, questions...are appreciated.
Title: I Was Dead Once
Scene: Mainstreaming
SNIPPED--Thanks for Stopping By~~~Annie~~~~
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13 comments:
Loved it! You did such a good job at hinting there was something out of sorts right from the get-go. No teasing the reader, but you still have me asking questions. Love it!
OOh, I really like the opening. And I love how she's so worrying about fitting in and all the crazy stuff like Cosmo and Mean Girls she's been using to prepare. I really wanna know about this prom malfunction adn why she's 20yrs out of her time scheme.
It's made a heaping helping of awesomesauce tho!!!
I love this. A lot. If you don't hurry and finish this, I may hurt you. Just saying. :)
Love the last few likes. "I don’t think people will know I’m pretty much a zombie or anything" <-- such a great, believable voice that you almost don't notice she's talking about something totally impossible :)
I love that something obviously huge (unfrozen, maybe?) has happened, but she's worried about her hair. I would have been. :)
i LOVE this! more..more ...more...MORE!! uh, please :)
Love the voice in this! Awesome tease :)
Oooo I want to know more! Particularly about what she means about twenty years in the future... Also, I'm totally with her on the curly hair thing. =D I love my hair straight, but some days i wish curls would come back.
I have to admit, I was a tiny bit confused at first. Senior year of college puts you at 21-22, so the first line actually really threw me off. Otherwise, I thought it was a nice fun tease.
Man, this is really awesome. I'm really intrigued. She's like from the future! Damn, i want to read more!
I like that it seems like Mom that's more behind the times, like she's the one having trouble with the "new" reality. I would definitely keep reading.
Oooh interesting premise! I really loved this! I want more! :D
I like the mention of the scar at the end. I really want to know how it got there.
Your details were just right--neither strong nor vague--because I understood that she's used to 80's fashion and adjusting to the modern world.
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