tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5655368363508700525.post2989331822141629441..comments2024-03-06T05:16:26.324-05:00Comments on Reading, Writing and Waiting: Tuesday Teaser Time!!Annie McElfreshhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14312634754232333138noreply@blogger.comBlogger22125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5655368363508700525.post-53037999220177641852010-01-11T10:21:01.961-05:002010-01-11T10:21:01.961-05:00This gave me the chills! I love this opening! The ...This gave me the chills! I love this opening! The first paragraph was brilliant! Awesome job!Karla Calalanghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17414349286625200655noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5655368363508700525.post-10683569131796811082010-01-06T15:01:36.271-05:002010-01-06T15:01:36.271-05:00Excellent, excellent opening paragraph! Really. ...Excellent, excellent opening paragraph! Really. Especially the twist in the last line.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5655368363508700525.post-45203880647266760772010-01-06T02:10:41.413-05:002010-01-06T02:10:41.413-05:00This is such a cool teaser!
Fantastic opening. And...This is such a cool teaser!<br />Fantastic opening. And LOVE that voice. Wicked!Bidishahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17382938442171208326noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5655368363508700525.post-58815186273264040812010-01-06T00:33:37.716-05:002010-01-06T00:33:37.716-05:00Good opening, a very interesting story unfolding h...Good opening, a very interesting story unfolding here. The only thing I would say is not to give away too much at once. Give me some action, but don't tell me about 11 years ago just yet - save that for a bigger reveal.Kristin Halbrookhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03975097574600459675noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5655368363508700525.post-58592553888260888312010-01-06T00:30:30.625-05:002010-01-06T00:30:30.625-05:00Oo, I love this voice. And so intriguing about the...Oo, I love this voice. And so intriguing about the lifelines. More please.Lauriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01846922950214539315noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5655368363508700525.post-70170526274250701792010-01-05T20:42:31.913-05:002010-01-05T20:42:31.913-05:00Awesome and freaky.....I love it!Awesome and freaky.....I love it!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01608753943318476195noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5655368363508700525.post-39725753607828888902010-01-05T20:01:15.647-05:002010-01-05T20:01:15.647-05:00This is a great first page. I love the voice and t...This is a great first page. I love the voice and the thing about a 5 year old stealing someone's soul is great! Loving it!Angiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12526875813399934443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5655368363508700525.post-86225332788720591922010-01-05T19:39:50.680-05:002010-01-05T19:39:50.680-05:00Awesome start! I love that you're incorporatin...Awesome start! I love that you're incorporating lifelines. *grins* Great teaser!S.H.https://www.blogger.com/profile/18285987152225186177noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5655368363508700525.post-91842797606574233762010-01-05T18:56:14.289-05:002010-01-05T18:56:14.289-05:00Thanks guys! I'm always so iffy on the opening...Thanks guys! I'm always so iffy on the openings. LOLAnnie McElfreshhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14312634754232333138noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5655368363508700525.post-46986024358197576312010-01-05T18:51:12.673-05:002010-01-05T18:51:12.673-05:00Woah, cool! I love the disappearing lifeline thing...Woah, cool! I love the disappearing lifeline thing, that's brilliant.Ifihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08968630996210057407noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5655368363508700525.post-58146475709913739272010-01-05T18:31:58.295-05:002010-01-05T18:31:58.295-05:00It's great! I love the snark, and the first c...It's great! I love the snark, and the first couple paragraphs draw me in immediately.Kaitlin Wardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01218406803223729204noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5655368363508700525.post-77358815865741718822010-01-05T17:36:28.410-05:002010-01-05T17:36:28.410-05:00Love. This. Opening. Especially the squiggly lines...Love. This. Opening. Especially the squiggly lines on your palm thing. And a five year old who you speak so poorly of? Interesting stuff.Kathy Bradeyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01370707259209847339noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5655368363508700525.post-5976166398440176862010-01-05T16:17:53.771-05:002010-01-05T16:17:53.771-05:00This. Is. So. Much. Better!!! I love the palm ide...This. Is. So. Much. Better!!! I love the palm idea, very hooky.J.S. Woodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09231458559331295121noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5655368363508700525.post-30653210595710056972010-01-05T15:53:09.303-05:002010-01-05T15:53:09.303-05:00This is a fab opening! A five year old who steals ...This is a fab opening! A five year old who steals souls?! I have to read more! Great tease :)Raven Mhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03538947519732493635noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5655368363508700525.post-62190044834450610112010-01-05T15:36:25.101-05:002010-01-05T15:36:25.101-05:00FABULOUS!!! I loved it the other night, and I tota...FABULOUS!!! I loved it the other night, and I totally love it today!! The life line part is killer. Can't wait to beta this!!Katie Ashleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11542035499311859866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5655368363508700525.post-45953728891598013712010-01-05T15:28:43.696-05:002010-01-05T15:28:43.696-05:00Wow - the line about the soul stealing five year o...Wow - the line about the soul stealing five year old bastard had me hooked! The flow is great and the way she picks up details about the doctors office is wonderful! Great job! :)Sumayyahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08407376976946002521noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5655368363508700525.post-82893500396067074892010-01-05T14:33:51.225-05:002010-01-05T14:33:51.225-05:00I think is opening is awesome! It defintely drew ...I think is opening is awesome! It defintely drew me in!Amandahttp://www.amandaplavich.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5655368363508700525.post-41428902410977731762010-01-05T13:33:34.288-05:002010-01-05T13:33:34.288-05:00Amazing opening, so stop complaining! :D The right...Amazing opening, so stop complaining! :D The right amount of info, character building, and 'course conflict. Cool to see someone else doing a Demon story too. ;)CJ Parishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02746279759903788463noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5655368363508700525.post-40420456735710333522010-01-05T12:51:41.416-05:002010-01-05T12:51:41.416-05:00Eek! This is creepy and awesome. I love the sarcas...Eek! This is creepy and awesome. I love the sarcastic voice.LizPagehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07863167617453436250noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5655368363508700525.post-7150290514034982022010-01-05T12:50:56.735-05:002010-01-05T12:50:56.735-05:00Dude, this voice is awesome!! :DDude, this voice is awesome!! :DRebecca A. Rogershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14124059241043445352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5655368363508700525.post-87680538252394004862010-01-05T12:39:01.279-05:002010-01-05T12:39:01.279-05:00Oh, man--disappearing lifelines? Soul stealing 5 y...Oh, man--disappearing lifelines? Soul stealing 5 yr olds? Paranoid schizos--or not? Count me hooked! Plus, love the voice--woot!houndrat ( Debra Driza )http://www.houndrat.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5655368363508700525.post-26773853949303055462010-01-05T12:00:30.140-05:002010-01-05T12:00:30.140-05:00Oh my goodness! I want more. I like ths opening,...Oh my goodness! I want more. I like ths opening, a lot.Aimeehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14304586030788892859noreply@blogger.com